The HMD Meme With Actual Constructive Criticism

[museboxy]

The HMD Meme With Actual Constructive Criticism

Wikipedia : Constructive criticism is the process of offering valid and well-reasoned opinions about the work of others, usually involving both positive and negative comments, in a friendly manner rather than an oppositional one.

[The Rules]

1. Post as the mun, and write down all your characters you would like to have any constructive criticism about. RP thread samples are optional.

2. Other people write down their crit about your RP-ing and your characters, etc, logged in or anon. Just praising people is fine, too.

3. No flaming or bashing allowed. No wanking, please!

4. Please keep in mind when you write your crit that your opinions may not always be right. Some things simply are a matter of individual taste, for example.

5. Please also remember that people are not obligated to accept all and every crit sent their way as valid. Sometimes it is, sometimes it isn't.

Comments

[1000morefools]

Anyone on my muselist

[mewtwowarrior]

I've got 3 characters that I've been playing lately that I'd love to get some crit on, if you'd like to see examples of how I play them, I've linked all the threads I've posted them at on their journals and in the case of the AU and OC characters, there's information on their journals about them.

wreckofaguy | Wreck-It Ralph | Wreck-It Ralph
I play Ralph at ink_city, memes, and musebox stuff. I'd love any crit or advice on how I'm playing him!

wreckyeah | Wreck-It Ralph - AU Hero's Duty Space Marine | Wreck-It Ralph/Hero's Duty
I play this AU Ralph at insertcoins and memes. Along with general crit and advice, I'd really like to get crit on if I'm keeping the balance between Ralph and Space Marine right.

bugbytes | The Queen Cy-Bug (OC) | Wreck-It Ralph/Hero's Duty
I play the Queen Cy-Bug at insertcoins and memes. She's based on the final boss of the Hero's Duty online game, and I've used other canon materials to put her together. I'm still finding my footing with her, I'd love any and all crit and advice for her!

Thanks for any and all crit/advice!

[losttruth]

stardustreverie- Marisa Kirisame - Touhou Project
Played at- theinstitute (AU) and 3step_paradise (Pulled from Discedo)

diaoyezong- Chen - Touhou Project
Played at- theinstitute (AU)

droppedbucket- Kisume - Touhou Project
Played at- theinstitute (AU)

colorfulbrilliance- Hong Meiling - Touhou Project
Played at- towerofanimus and 3step_paradise (Pulled from Animus)

prismaticdestruction- Flandre Scarlet- Touhou Project
Played at- gargleblasted

Any crit is welcome, as I still am nervous about each one of these.

[(Anonymous)]

You RP Jinto!

[1000morefools]

I do! He can be kinda milquetoast but he's fun to play off of more forceful personalities. If you have a CotS/BotS muse i'd be happy to play with you, and I know someone who plays Lafiel who'd also be happy to join in.

[tohko_amano]

Tower of Animus:

Tohko Amano-Bungaku Shoujo-tohko_amano

chaos-Xenosaga-lightofhumanity

Raphael-El Shaddai: Ascension of the Metatron-godheals

Yotsuba Koiwai-Yotsuba!&-sunflowerfairy

I'm always happy to get critique, especially about Tohko and Raphael. There's always room for improvement!

[(Anonymous)]

Haven't seen you play before but just giving you some drive-by love for Ralph! I love that movie!

[criminallyinsane]

@zodion

Just looking for crit on this girl, since she's my only active muse atm.

[(Anonymous)]

your yotsuba could use a little polish methinks. granted, it's been a while since I read Yotsuba!& but I think she ought to be a little more... whimsical, maybe? have her attention drift away a little more and give her some more carefree energy. (also like I said it's been a while, but did she speak in 3rd person that much?)

one thing I can also recommend is when you're doing action brackets, slap some HTML on the brackets to make them a little more distinct from the dialogue. make it italicized or small or whatever else! it's just a nitpick really

however! despite those, you still play a wonderful little yotsuba and I really enjoy threading with her :) I think you really do know her character even if the polish might be a bit rough, so please keep up the good work!

[tohko_amano]

Ah, thank you! It's always a little difficult playing children, so I'll be sure to take your advice into account. The volumes of manga I've read have her speak in third person a bit..but I've probably been overdoing it. I'll get better at that in the future!

Erm..actually..I'm terrible at HTML, so I have no idea how to make it italicized or smaller. I'll have to look that up soon if it makes reading my posts a bit easier.

However, I'm glad you enjoy playing with my Yotsuba despite my hiccups!~ ^^ I'll do my best! I have no idea who you are, anon, but thank you!~

[(Anonymous)]

brief HTML lesson! it's pretty easy really. for italics, surround your text with < i > text here < /i > ...except take out those spaces. like this! for smaller text, do something similar: < small > text here < /small > and you get something like this! I hope that helps :)

[sunflowerfairy]

Oh, thank you very much! That really does help me out a lot! Again, I have no idea who you are, anon, but thank you so much!

[(Anonymous)]

I recall threading with your Utena before, and I rather enjoyed it! I apologize for dropping so abruptly the last time we did, but I'd definitely like to thread with you again sometime.

[curiouslyhigh]

smuppetwrangler Bro Strider
heatandclockwork Dave Strider

I need some concrit with their voices in particular. I know they're kind of... blargy, out of a woeful lack of super hip coolkid lingo. I need to know how to fix that!

[shiripyuri]

I-I've only played on musebox till now, but...

Leo Baskerville | Pandora Hearts | rlyhatesgoldenlights
Soushi Miketsukami | Inu x Boku SS | yourfriendlypuppyservant
Kyoko Sakura | Puella Magi Madoka Magica | goldenspear
Shakugan | Sengoku Youko | halfhumanhalfdemon

[markofthewise]

@luceti
Sokka | markofthewise / Avatar: The Last Airbender
Wolverine | snikting / X-Men: Evolution
Ganondorf | dragmire / The Legend of Zelda
Jack Horner | originaljackass / Fables

For people in game with Sokka, I should disclaimer he's currently under a plot that is seriously affecting his personality. If he seems off, it's because he's supposed to be.

[1000morefools]

Thanks!

[eightlazylegs]

Earth-3 Red Hood | aceinthehood | Batman: Brave and the Bold
Music Meister | hypnotic_patter | Batman: Brave and the Bold
Sgt. Andrew Carter | stlg13bomber | Hogan's Heroes
Abe Sapien | bprd_fishman | Hellboy (movie series)
Alice/Pretender | fleshydisguise | Transformers: Revenge of the Fallen
Alice Liddell | queensbane | Alice: Madness Returns
Tyrell Badd | tasteoftruth | Ace Attorney Investigations: Miles Edgeworth
Vladik Norokov | jungiangarden | Psychonauts OC
Hermes | eightlazylegs | OC octopus (formerly of luceti until my dumb self got injured)

Red Hood's my newest muse, so I'm still working on getting his voice and personality down, but crit welcomed on anyone!

[didhisbest]

John Winchester | Supernatural | didhisbest
Dean Winchester | Supernatural | onasteelhorse
Sam Winchester | Supernatural | luciferspromdress
Daryl Dixon | The Walking Dead | theonlyzenone

And then these guys right here!

Open to any and all crit!

[roadblasted]

roadblasted | Turbo | Wreck-It Ralph
My biggest concern with Turbo where is always in his interpretation. Do you feel his personality/attitude/viewpoints/manner of speech/etc makes sense at this canonpoint from what the film implies? How do you feel about his, uh, unusual euphemisms? I love exploring his character and I'm always looking for feedback on how I could better it!

confectioncrown | King Candy | Wreck-It Ralph
I'm always ridiculously nervous with KC; attempting to emulate an Annie-winning performance is intimidating, to say the least. His subtleties are especially tricky to nail. How's his balance between goofy/cheery and frightening/manipulative? Is he lisping too much? Any kind of critique for him is greatly appreciated!

licoricewarp | Vanellope Von Schweetz | Wreck-It Ralph
Vanellope is a fairly new muse for me, and while she is very slightly AU (she's actually just supposed to be from the sequel to Sugar Rush, which is more like a new and improved version of the first game), her personality is essentially the same and I want to capture it as best I can! So again, any constructive crit or advice on her is loved!

nomorebedtimestories | Agatha Prenderghast | ParaNorman
While Aggie is an important character in her canon, she only appears during the third act, and due to the situation we perhaps only see a little of her true personality. So once again, feedback on my interpretation would be excellent!

telemysticist | Gideon Gleeful | Gravity Falls
Too psycho? Not psycho enough? Too Mabel obsessed? Not Mabel obsessed enough? How's his accent? Note that I kind of ignore the episode "Little Dipper" as far as his characterization for reasons I will be happy to explain if you want a really long rant, but nonetheless, I'd love some crit on Giddy!

smokeb0mbs | Randy Cunningham | Randy Cunningham: 9th Grade Ninja
I'm going to try to get back into playing Randy because the new episodes have got me REALLY excited, but if you've seen him around or threaded with him before and are familiar with his canon, I would be HUGELY thankful for any feedback or critique on him! He's a very quirky character and a bit of an unusual type of muse for me, so I'm never quite sure if I'm getting him right.

[rancis]

bakerstreet
Rancis Fluggerbutter | Wreck-It Ralph | rancis

hollyheights
Ion | Tales of the Abyss | fontastically

mallowhallow
Oliver | VOCALOID | ensconces

[mayamali]

I've got way too many muses to count, so here are my main two I'm looking for the most crit on!

Cyclonus | Transformers: More than Meets the Eye | notsostraightforward | Sample
Breakdown | Transformers: Prime | neverrun | Sample

POST ALL THE ROBOTS also my muselist, if you want to look at some of my other guys.

[coronis]

I've got
Ahiru @ Amat
Fakir @ Zodion
Rue @ Somarium -- she is very new, would love thoughts

all crit is appreciated

[righteously]

Dean Winchester | Supernatural | righteously | @ entranceway

Also a personal HMD on my journal if you'd rather. I would appreciate any feedback at all!

[afallenstar]

cape_kore

Anna Milton | Supernatural | afallenstar
Laura Hawley | Original Character | facilitated
Raven Darkholme | X-Men: First Class | hidingtiger

entranceway

River Tam | Firefly | perceptum

thenetwork

Samantha Winchester (genderswap AU) | Supernatural | notmeantforthis

All journals also have personal HMD posts (as far as I'm aware) and there's also a muselist here, though there's not many journals listen in there.